A&P Team C& C please, did another shoot v. outdoors.

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  1. Tonster MBA

    Tonster MBA OT'r of the Year 2013 OT Supporter

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    You know the deal, If I ain't cryin, you ain't tryin. Critique me bitches.


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  2. Tonster MBA

    Tonster MBA OT'r of the Year 2013 OT Supporter

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    IB you hate the gallery and my site sucks
     
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    2 and 3 are pretty damn awesome. Clone out the little white speck in the center frame of 2.

    The flat light on her stomach in 4 is pretty un flattering and a bit strange, and the white balance on 7 makes him look like he's 2 steps from turning into a zombie.
     
  4. isaac86hatch

    isaac86hatch This thread sucks

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    Pay more attention to your backgrounds.
     
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    2 and 6 looks good
     
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    Tonster MBA OT'r of the Year 2013 OT Supporter

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    example?
     
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    I like 2 and 3. However, for 3, I wish you hadn't cut off her feet and had paid attention to the background. It would have been much better if the entire background had been grass instead of the road, trees, and poles in the background.
     
  8. Tonster MBA

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    2 & 3, great.

    Notice how the lighting is different, from 1, 4 and 5. There's a flatness about the latter. More of 2 & 3's lighting quality.
     
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    2 is ftw!
     
  11. White Stormy

    White Stormy Take that, subspace!

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    I really like 2 and 3. I'd like 4 more if it was cropped tighter and she was looking up a bit more
     
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    White Stormy Take that, subspace!

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    they're all nice. they should be happy with the pics
     
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    Nice! The lump in the dudes pocket in the last shot is .... distracting.
     
  14. xenon supra

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    2/3 are best, watch your backgrounds & shadows.

    big improvement over some of your past stuff, keep it up :bigok:
     
  15. Drunken Karnie Midget

    Drunken Karnie Midget In Yeo We Trust, All Others Pay Cash OT Supporter

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    The first 5, her poses seem bland and uninspired.. like a complete lack of personality expressed through posture (except #2)

    3 Too seperated from the background, almost like she was blue screened into the scene. Lighten up the background a touch to make her a part of the scene, and not just superimposed on it. The roads don't help either.

    6 and 7 I'm not sure where you took these, or what you did in pp, but once again your subject and your background look completely segregated, almost as if you extracted your subject, and pasted him into a different photo..

    Overall, lighting (on your subject) is good, and composition is technically correct, but the seperation from their surroundings just makes the photos look as deep as a tea spoon. I'm not saying do away with a shallow DoF, but it's more light and texture that seems to cut between the two.
     
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    Tonster MBA OT'r of the Year 2013 OT Supporter

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    No blackberry for home?
     
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    My post makes sense to me.


    ...and me only? :noes:
     

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