SRS Something I wrote V. Depressed

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  1. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    Cold and Catatonic

    So hard to speak,
    So cold and catatonic,
    It hurts to breath each breath,
    This numbing feeling,
    With each moment,

    Last night I dreamt,
    All alone and running,
    From the darkness rising,
    Hard to see what is in front of me,
    And then a light grew bright,
    To light a path,

    As fast as it appeared,
    It disappeared,
    Again running from the darkness,
    Loss of sight,
    I'm running blind.

    So hard to speak,
    So cold and catatonic,
    It hurts to breath each breath,
    This numbing feeling,
    With each moment,

    So I try and scream,
    For someone to hear me,
    Falling on deaf ears,
    My screams,

    And so I wake,
    Still with that feeling,
    Inside me.

    So cold and catatonic

    Guess Writing is my only release, so any c&c would be appreciated
  2. Takitome

    Takitome New Member

    May 12, 2007
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    It's deep
    I wonder if writing the poem lifts your spirit or makes you more depressed reading the words after?
  3. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    I know it doesnt lift my spirits, it is a mental release though which is nice, but still depressed as shit
  4. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    bump for C&C
  5. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    Something as simple as a smile,
    Can brighten the darkest day,
    There was something,
    So trivial,
    Something so small,
    Something I fell in love with,
    Every time you smiled,
    Every time you spoke,
    Every time you laughed,
    I fell in love all over again,
    So here I am,
    Heart broken,
    Because you couldnt see,
    What you meant to me,
    You were the light,
    To guide me though the darkness,
    That I live with everyday,
    Somewhere along the way,
    I lost my way.

    Wrote this today, writing things down helps alot
  6. chicken leg

    chicken leg New Member

    May 13, 2007
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    Wow... I love that... It's awesome... i really really love that
    You could use that on girls to make them swoon lol

    I know what you mean, i keep a note book that i write poetry in... that and piano helps with release. I now write and play instead of cutting like i used to... Its a wonderful alternative. Awesome for u to realise that.

    and again...AWESOME POEM
  7. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    thank you, I really have only 2-3 releases and non are verbal, poetry/writing, working on my car, driving aimlessly for hours on end
  8. Vixxen

    Vixxen New Member

    Sep 13, 2006
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    just around the corner
    i love that
  9. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    thank you
  10. 04JETTA

    04JETTA Active Member OT Supporter

    Apr 18, 2007
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    The Prarie State/The Hoosier State
    :bowdown::bowdown::bowdown::bowdown::bowdown: im starting to feel like this on and off
  11. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    Its not a god feeling, so i grab a pen and paper and write, I have about 30 or 40 more poems if any one is interested
  12. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    Yesterday's Tomorrow

    A yesterdays tomorrow,
    Has come full force,
    To let us start again,
    Each day,
    Has given us an out,
    An out from a life,
    Of mediocrity,
    Why live each day,
    Like days before,
    Why live each day,
    Believing tomorrow will be different,
    A cliche at best,
    But live each day like it's your last,
    You wont miss a moment,
    So go,
    Go outside and smell the air,
    Go to your loved one and re-enforce that feeling,
    Go forth and live each day,
    Believing its your last,
    Because tomorrow,
    You have another chance,
    To take a different path,
    To find your self once more.

    Wrote this on June 8th
  13. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    I wrote this one after I saw my grandfather, he is currently dying from cancer

    I'm Sorry

    I'm sorry I wasn't there,
    I'm sorry I didn't call,
    The past torments me,
    The tears they roll,
    As I get close to losing you forever,
    You've always been there when I needed,
    I tried to be there when you needed me,
    You never know how close,
    You are to losing someone,
    Until that day is right around the corner,
    Last night when I talked to you,
    I couldn't bare to speak,
    So I told you I had to go back to work,
    I couldn't say goodbye,
    Because I almost started crying,
    This is the only way to say I'm sorry,
    I don't know why,
    But I promiss you I will be there,
    I will be there,
    When you need me most,
    And I will take care of her
    When you are gone,
    I promise you I will no let you down,
    My eye are tearing because I know,
    That soon you will be gone,
    So I write this as I am in tears,
    Just to get this off my chest,
    I love you,
    Just as much as you love me,
    But I will be there,
    I will,
    God bless your soul and everything,
    You taught me while you were here,
    I am myself largely cause of you,
    I love you dearly and I wish that I never comes,
    To where I have to say goodbye
  14. Legend Zero

    Legend Zero Active Member OT Supporter

    Jan 14, 2005
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    i personally feel you should've ended with...
    "So hard to speak,
    So cold and catatonic,
    It hurts to breath each breath,
    This numbing feeling,
    With each moment"

    to keep the stanza pattern going, but it is nice. :hs:
  15. Vixxen

    Vixxen New Member

    Sep 13, 2006
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    just around the corner
    thanks for sharing your work
  16. PanzerAce

    PanzerAce Active Member

    Feb 25, 2006
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    N37°18'37" W120°29'50"
    I know that for me, writing always helped me just get it all out there. I couldn't/can't ever read what I wrote after I write it though without feeling down again....kinda makes it hard to clean up my folders :hsd:
  17. inyoeye

    inyoeye huh?

    Jun 27, 2007
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    So Cal
    amazing work man. hope everything gets better for you man
  18. seejay

    seejay New Member

    Jun 24, 2007
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    Have you considered submitting any of these?
  19. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    Thanks every one for your comments
  20. di3soft

    di3soft Guest


    All I ever wanted
    Was for someone to hold my hand
    And tell me
    Everything will be alright
    All I ever needed
    Was for someone
    To come and save me from my self
    All I ever gotten
    Was a cold shoulder and betrayal
    All I know
    Is I have no one to trust
    And count only on my self
  21. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    I want to hear you laugh like you really mean it,
    collapse onto the darkened ground,
    and stare with me into the open sky,
    the laughter subsides,
    just stay and lay with me,
    above us only sky,
    below us only dirt,
    but in between,
    there in that moment,
    just close your eyes,
    and forget the world,
    with me.

    and yes i know there are some parts that sounds like snow patrol, probably because I was listening to them at the time
  22. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    my friend sent this to me and she thought that it was me completely, i guess I'm just a doormat after all, figure id post it

    I'm sorry
    that i bought you roses
    to tell you that i like you

    I'm sorry
    That I was raised with respect
    not to sleep with you when you were drunk

    I'm sorry
    That my body's not ripped enough
    to "satisfy" your wants

    I'm sorry
    that I open your car door,
    and pull out your chair like I was raised

    I'm sorry
    That I'm not cute enough
    to be "your guy"

    I'm sorry
    That I am actually nice;
    not an complete asshole

    I'm sorry
    I don't have a huge bank account
    to buy you expensive things

    I'm sorry
    I like to spend quality nights at home
    cuddling with you, instead of at a club

    I'm sorry
    I would rather make love to you then just f**k you
    like some random guy.

    I'm sorry
    That I am always the one you need to talk to,
    but never good enough to date

    I'm sorry
    That I always held your hair back when you threw up,and didn't get mad at you for puking in my car,
    but when we went out you went home with another guy

    I'm sorry
    That I am there to pick you up at 4am when your new man hit you and dropped you off in the middle of nowhere,
    but not good enough to listen to me when I need a friend

    I'm sorry
    If I start not being there, and being used as a door mat, only to be thrown to the side when the new .. comes around

    I'm sorry
    If I don't answer my phone anymore when you call, to listen to you cry for hours, instead of getting a couple hours of sleep before work

    I'm sorry that you can't realize.. I've been the one all along.

    I'm sorry
    If you read this and know somebody like this
    but don't care But most of all

    I'm sorry
    For not being sorry anymore

    I'm sorry
    That you can't accept me for who I am

    I'm sorry
    I cant ever do anything right, and nothing that I do is good
    enough to make it in your world.

    I'm sorry
    I caught your bf with another girl and told you about it, I thought that was what friends were for...

    I'm sorry
    That I told you I loved you and actually meant it.

    I'm sorry
    That I talked to you for nine hours on Thanksgiving when your bf was threatening you instead of spending time with my family.

    I'm Sorry..

    That i cared

    I'm sorry
    that I listen to you at night talk about how you wish you could have done something different.
  23. di3soft

    di3soft Guest

    bump for more c&c, I want to get better at this whole writing thing it would be great if I could submit it somewhere

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