SRS Something i wrote today, thought I'd share

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  1. durondude

    durondude OT Addict

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    Life’s decisions has brought me to this point,
    till life’s end, it seems sorrow won’t leave me be,
    i can see my end moving away as hope fills my heart,
    frustration sets in and locks my life up into a cage

    I fear the goal of success could never be realized,
    for success itself bring more goals that yearn to be succeeded
    my mind shuts out my heart’s desires and kills my spirit
    the heart stops caring, stops crying and finally, stops trying

    these days seem to never end, dragging on forever
    my soul longs for the time forever comes
    existing in a place outside of time
    forever to hold on to my faith

    existing in my own heart, forever holding on.

    :hs:
    been feeling kinda down lately, this just came out of no where
     
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    thats really good
     
  3. durondude

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    I’m trying to find a place to fit in
    a place that does not exist
    a place deep within

    next to my heart but far from my soul
    still, I try to find it
    to help fill this hole

    the rain falls again, but only on my path,
    and I hate being wet,
    how long will my tears last?
     
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    Interesting.
     
  5. durondude

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    my girlfriend asked me the other day why I could write such things...

    I told her, this is how I release my stress when I'm down.

    She then asked why couldn't I write nice things when I'm happy.

    I told her that it's because when I'm happy, I express it through my everlasting smile.
     
  6. durondude

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    Last night, I drempt of my funeral.

    I saw my family members crying, my mom mostly.

    Everyone else just sort of stared in disbelief, including me.

    Some how, I knew I wasn’t like everyone else anymore.

    I felt a warm presence around me, but my heart was cold.

    The fire of life that once existed inside was no more.

    I didn’t even shed a single tear.

    My girlfriend gave my dead body a kiss on its forehead.

    I was never going to see her again…

    I did not feel my heart beating.

    It had stopped long before my life left me…



    My friends were there, some cried, some didn’t.

    Either way, it was as if something was holding my feelings back.

    I did not try to reach out for them at all.

    I could hear what each one was thinking…

    yet I could not understand it… It was foreign to my mind…

    Perhaps if I still had my heart… I would understand…



    Then I thought, I don’t want to die anymore, this is sad.

    It hurts more then anything to see anyone cry because of me…

    It was too late, they couldn’t hear me… I was dead.

    I walked around, giving everyone a single hug.

    I began to feel as if I didn’t belong any more…

    Somthing told me, I didn’t belong…



    I closed my eyes and woke up.



    We often think about how messed up our lives are…

    how we want to just give up… we never stop to think of how we affect others.

    I felt sad today… but the alternative is worse. Thinking of my past mistakes makes me want to give up.

    It always outways to good I’ve done. Maybe I do think too much… perhaps what I need, I’ll never find.

    Each time, the opportunity presents itself, I find it harder and harder to resist. Taking on a new path after death seems not that far anymore.

    It would be cowardly to give up, and no one wants that. Not even I, the king of excuses. This IS just another excuse at least for now. I must face life, in all of its sorrowful times. In all of its hardship. In all of its Greatness.

    Life is too short to be sad, I think… I think I’ll be happy. I think I will.
     
  7. Legend Zero

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    hey man, i like this poem :hs: i have a suggestion for you though, instead of cage you should try finding something else in the first stanza, just puts a end to the flow that is created imo in terms of rhythm.

    goodluck.
     
  8. durondude

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    Thanks, I wasn't really going for any kind of flow.. I just sorta wrote what came to mind... :hs: but thanks
     

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