Some more lyrics (rip em apart)

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  1. Jadix

    Jadix The Nice Guy

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    Chorus:
    Could you make it
    If nobody could see you
    Could you make it
    Would you sit and beg too?
    Could you make it
    With nowhere to go
    Could you make it
    Without a home

    A woman came by our place
    With three kids and a hard face
    They had bags collecting cans
    One of them without some pants
    I wonder if at night she cries
    Cuz her kids wont have nice lives
    And she still looks in their eyes
    Before they sleep and she lies

    CHORUS

    Saw a man sleep in the park
    And I thought my life was hard?
    He doesn't eat everyday
    Smokes some crack to feel ok
    He feels some peace when he's high
    But he's dying otherwise
    Sometimes men give up the fight
    Take a glimpse and you'll see why

    CHORUS
     
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  2. BlinginAssRims

    BlinginAssRims Now I'm blaumped out

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    i think you need to broaden your vocabulary, that might be why the lyrics come off as trite.
     
  3. Jadix

    Jadix The Nice Guy

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    Ok, thanks for the advice. :bigthumb:
     
  4. bowrofl

    bowrofl New Member

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    dont constrain yourself to the verse/chorus/verse/chorus/bridge/chorus format of songs... if you want to go off in another direction, go for it.
     
  5. BlinginAssRims

    BlinginAssRims Now I'm blaumped out

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    keep it up too, dude.
     

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