A&P lend me your eyes - new noir shot.

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  1. jared_IRL

    jared_IRL OT Supporter

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    playing with this shot this morning, need more eyes on it.

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  2. pawis

    pawis werd em up

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    i think its a great shot, my noob eyes cant see anything to improve upon
     
  3. IntheWorks

    IntheWorks windin film.. takin pics Moderator

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    her head looks overly huge. other than that, I dig it. Is this the chick that wanted in last minute from your headshot thread?
     
  4. jared_IRL

    jared_IRL OT Supporter

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    I thought her head looked a little big too... Not sure why..

    and yeah, that's her.
     
  5. Etherized

    Etherized Active Member

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    Like it.
     
  6. Primal

    Primal Pavement Killer

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    What he said.
    To me it looks great.
    BTW: I love your work.
     
  7. tetsuo

    tetsuo And shepherds we shall be...

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    i think its the angle her head is at, but it looks a little big. other than that, its a great shot :coold:
     
  8. Perkwunos

    Perkwunos Dog Bones OT Supporter

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    she was leaning forward?
     
  9. FlashhslaF

    FlashhslaF New Member

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    do you have a picture where she isn't making the :O: face? The more I look at her face the awkward it feels for 'me' :dunno:
     
  10. Girth

    Girth ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ OT Supporter

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    Looks good
     
  11. OlafBeserka

    OlafBeserka girls pee pee when they see me OT Supporter

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  12. jared_IRL

    jared_IRL OT Supporter

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    thanks guys!!

    new edit - smaller head:


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  13. johan

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    enjoyable shot...good execution, good balance of light/dark. and she's pleasing to look at

    clean up the facial tones a little. some slight blotchiness on her cheek and forehead.

    if you look at some of the mansfield examples from the period, these nightclub shots were strong, sultry but always feminine. the epitome of female fuckableness, set just slightly above.

    otherwise, superb.
     
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    smaller head ftw. great shot broseph
     
  15. Jcolman

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    Very nicely done! My only minor issue is the cropping/framing. She's looking off the side of the frame so I'd like to see more room on the right. Otherwise, great job!!
     
  16. johnson

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    head/face looks like it's chopped on there
     
  17. isaac86hatch

    isaac86hatch This thread sucks

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    First: Nice shot, Man. You're really coming into your own.

    Critique:
    1) The lighting ratio. I would much more prefer that she was a bit brighter – 1/2 stop maybe – than the band. She's the subject.

    2) I really do not like that she facing out of frame. Eyes follow eyes. So in this case, my eyes go to hers and then off the image.
     
  18. turbodude

    turbodude Just a photographer OT Supporter

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    i am really diggin your film noir stuff, makes me want to try it so bad.
     
  19. f/2.8L

    f/2.8L New Member

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    Agree with all of this!
     
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    Love it.
     
  21. GlobeGuy

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    I like the fact that he broke this rule, and this picture works with that rule broken.
     
  22. xenon supra

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    agreed
     
  23. TheManLouisianaFace

    TheManLouisianaFace and decide!

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    . The mouth thing looks like someone yelled "freeze" while she was talking. Other than that it's great.
     
  24. TheManLouisianaFace

    TheManLouisianaFace and decide!

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    makes me envision an audience outside of the frame out in the darkness.
     
  25. ace3

    ace3 mouthify my wang.

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    looks good, but doesn't look like she's singing. looks like she's just holding her mouth open
     

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