WEB I just wrote a review for defiedreality.com v.Critique it please?

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  1. symptic

    symptic I run companies

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    Yuppy Have a seat right there....

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    very generic feel to it;
     
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    Jesse PSN: iamajesse; XBL: Inhale My Rod; G8 GT crew; Ne OT Supporter

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    I feel like someone spammed me on AIM about this same crap :hsugh:
     
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    kingtoad OT Supporter

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    Vtec44 OG!

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    I agree, it has a very generic feel to it. Maybe you can add a few comments from the moderators & users to see why they like the site.
     
  7. trev.the.enemy

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    That would be flawless. :eek3:
     
  9. dawgboye

    dawgboye I'm a businessman who's commodity happens to be co

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    How the crap did you type so much but say so little?
     
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    Chimpa Codigo Bаnned bу Ѕuреr Modulators

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  11. symptic

    symptic I run companies

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    Wasn't I. :dunno:

    It's a fledgling general-topic forum. I wrote what my target audience would want to see, and provided some figures for them to wrap their heads around. :dunno: I have a tendancy to write a lot. :dunno:
     
  12. dawgboye

    dawgboye I'm a businessman who's commodity happens to be co

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    Oh, wait, you wrote a review for yourself?
     
  13. trev.the.enemy

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    No.

    He wrote a review for my site.
     
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  15. symptic

    symptic I run companies

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    There are several sections on the community about differing topics which the relatively youthful community discusses, ranging from politics, to music and entertainment, to games and electronics, and touching more on the emotional side with a relationships section as well as a place to relieve some stress and release some of your potentially pent up anger.

    ^^
    That sentence is hard to read, consider breaking it up or at least throwing in some semicolon action.

    "There are many sections in the community consisting of differing topics in which the relatively youth-filled member base discusses. You can find nearly every topic; ranging from politics, music and entertainment, games and electronics, and there is also a section especially for relationship discussion and advice. Those looking to blow off a little steam will find solace in an area called (whatever it is) that allows you to vent out all of your frustrations without fear of degrading the general populus."

    Just a quick lil change-up I did there.

    Also.. it's Britney* Spears

    Capitalize "business" in "Defied Reality as a business" and perhaps change it to "Defied Reality as an Image/Branding,etc" as I wouldn't necessarily want to sign up for a forum after reading about the business aspect of it.

    I'd also skip the whole how much money have you made/plan on making part, as well as say "hey this is my friend's forum"

    Complex spam still looks like spam. Maybe refer to him as an acquaintance on a common site/location.

    Didn't read everything though so maybe I'll go back later and check the rest.
     
  17. symptic

    symptic I run companies

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    Thanks. :coold:

    OT needs reputation points of something. :dunno:
     
  18. dawgboye

    dawgboye I'm a businessman who's commodity happens to be co

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    Gotcha
     

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