hey guyce, critique our first song? *link*

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  1. crotch

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    not my cup of tea
     
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    ok?

    critique the skill rather than just saying you don't like the style
     
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    well i'm not a musician so my musical skills are lax but if i may critique the production. the intro threw me off. i've listened to a few demos in my day (while interning at independent record labels) and i have gotten some insight into what A+R reps look for. general rule of thumb is if you don't make an impact within the first minute (for punk labels its more like 10-20 seconds) you will be discounted as a sorrowful newb.

    it sounds like this is more of a casual thing for you though and if you're just doing it for fun you're way ahead of the game. if it's just for kicks then keep it up and fuck what other people say.
     
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    You should play it with a tighter ska-feel. It would really help, since the chords aren't very rock-ish. Make a tune instead of the screaming.

    Other than that, this is actually better than I expected. Needs some work though. Keep it up.
     
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    :coold: thanks man

    here are some more things we just recorded, just jamming :o

    http://www.aww-kittah-aww.com/up/files/794/03 Track 3.mp3
    http://www.aww-kittah-aww.com/up/files/794/04 Track 4.mp3
    http://www.aww-kittah-aww.com/up/files/794/05 Track 5.mp3
    http://www.aww-kittah-aww.com/up/files/794/06 Track 6.mp3
     
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    thank you!
     
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    vocals suck but the music is alright

    drummer needs more structure, and the guitarist should extend his "ticks". it doesn't fit the rest of the music very well
     
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    thanks man :hs:
     
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    The pig squeal technique doesn't really work as well with ska, but i like the style of the instrumentals
     
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    :cool: thank you for listening.
     
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    This is not true norwegian black metal
     
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    we've been had!
     
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    Guitar is too loud in the mix, rhythm is too quiet, especially the bass. There is obvious bias and the guitar isnt even decent, thats fuckin stupid. And the vocalist sounds like he's just fucking around, why would anyone take that shit seriously. I can almost see the jackass smirk on his face through my speakers.
     
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    :rofl: :love:
     
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    it was our first recording, ever. The vocalist and I have never recorded anything at all.

    I'm self taught on the drums.

    We recorded in a regular room with no sound deadening and it was all recorded via one condenser.

    How the fuck do you think it's going to sound?
     
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    oh and all this coming from the jackass who listens to coldplay and U2

    your opinion = worthless
     
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    t8thgr8 evry day im hustlin'

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    Why is that my concern that you recorded it so shittily and for the first time? YOU asked US to ctitique it and started with the smart mouth right of the bat on the 3rd post. Maybe next time come at us with a better take and recording before you ask for opinions. And how the fuck would you know what I listen to? Do I know you?

    Your band = worthless
     
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    crotch BONE PUPPET LLC.

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    LOL get a bit butthurt b/c I made fun of your faggot band taste?

    I wasn't an asshole until you showed up. I asked him to critique the style/skill not the production.

    go suck bonos dick.
     
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    t8thgr8 evry day im hustlin'

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    What the fuck are you talking about? Again, how would you know my band taste? And where exactly do I appear to be butthurt? I simply critiqued your shitty song, as the title of the thread requests, and said what needed to be said, and you know I was right. I didnt knock the drumming at all, mainly just the pig on the mike and 10 year old playing guitar. You seem like a cool dude bro, im glad your true colors surfaced before your band takes off.

    And for the record my favorite bands are as follows

    U2
    Muse
    Kings of Leon
    Jimi
    The Verve

    And more recently MGMT and My morning Jacket

    Coldplay is cool but not a favorite, I dont really appreciate the whole U2 wannabe thing they seemed to have embraced. But do I give a fuck what you think of my musical tastes? Hardly. Excuse the fuck out of me for liking good songs.
     
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    screamer needs some serious work
     
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    drums and lead guitar are too loud too. i cant even hear the bass and rythm.
    probably should turn up the vocals to but he kinda sucks
     
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    lol @ calling U2 good

    fail. they suck as does Coldplay :ugh:
     
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    check these out?
     
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    o i just listend to the first one. you guys are a lot better doing that ska style id stay away from the grindcore. vocals need to be turned way up i can barely hear him on some of the songs
     

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