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  1. lemans23

    lemans23 PV - The Vision of Sound

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    First one: The focus isn't sharp enough on "MENU". I re-took it and got the focus right, but the stupid ass CS2 crashed and it won't let me open it. Knowing that, what else does it need? Second one: I like this one a lot except for the king in the background. It kinda pulls away from the Ace. What do you think? -Dave [​IMG] [​IMG]
     
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    first one is decent, menu is fairly sharp, least at this resolution.

    second one is kinda meh, alotta yellow in the cards, and the red of the kind does take away from the red of the ace. all black and white and a bright red ace could look really cool.
     
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    lemans23 PV - The Vision of Sound

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    Hmm, I'll try to re-take it.
     
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    lemans23 PV - The Vision of Sound

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    I like the second one still because the cards seem to have a lot of "heaviness" to them; they don't look like something that weighs 1 gram. I'll retake the pic tonight w/o any face cards.
     
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    lemans23 PV - The Vision of Sound

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    Alright, here's the retake plus some more.

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    Critique please! :wavey:
     
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    Torps New Member

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    like the last one.. diagonal lines invoke the feeling of movement though, unless you were going for the clash.
     
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    i like the first set of cards, and the pencil/END one. the vignette on the pencil kinda makes me think of a screen starting to go black/curtain call.

    cool ideas.
     
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    what are you using to shoot these?
     
  9. I like the "END" shot

    but I think it would have been cooler as "END?" and insted of the dot under the question mark the broken pencil point would be there. :coold:
     
  10. lemans23

    lemans23 PV - The Vision of Sound

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    Canon 20D, kit lens 18-55mm EF-S.

    Thanks for the comments and suggestions. :bigthumb:
     
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    turbodude Just a photographer OT Supporter

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    i would suggest stopping down to get a little more dof. some of them look too shallow. i like your ideas, but the cards pictures aren;t doing it for me at all. I don't know what your trying to convey. is it a product shot? is it a person hiding aces? i dunno.
     
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    on the ipod one what was your lightsouce. the highlight is really qierd and distracting. it also needs fill light of some sort to soften the shadows that are all over the place. compistion is heavy to the left do to the large dark spot. it also needs more space at the top of the ipod.
     
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    lemans23 PV - The Vision of Sound

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    My lens would have snapped if I stopped it down anymore, it's all it had to give. The card pics are just for the contrast, being overwhelmed by a majority while still having one thing be more prominent.

    On the ipod pic, there was no light source, it was sunlight falling through my window.

    Thanks all :wavey:
     
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    it would have snapped? huh?
     

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